[Milton-L] new from saint-exupery press: the improved paradise lost

Sara van den Berg vandens at slu.edu
Sat Oct 26 14:45:17 EDT 2013


Since "None ever wished it longer," the short version will be eagerly
anticipated--perhaps a tweet?

Svdb


On Sat, Oct 26, 2013 at 1:19 PM, Gregory Machacek <
Gregory.Machacek at marist.edu> wrote:

> I'm in the process of composing a note to the Saint-Exupery edition that
> might address some of these concerns.  But I'll examine the places to which
> you direct my attention, and if needed, cut some more.
>
>
>
> Greg Machacek
> Professor of English
> Marist College
>
>
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> Date: 10/26/2013 02:03PM
> Subject: Re: [Milton-L] new from saint-exupery press: the improved
> paradise lost
>
>
> Not so fast, Bentley Boy!  You have not cut the Book III dialogue of
> Father and
> Son which directly references (and contrastively parallels) the
> Sin/Death/Satan
> episode near the end of Book II, and in so doing uses Pauline passages
> (Romans
> and Corinthians--"O Death, where is thy sting?" perhaps the best known of
> those) to personify Sin and Death.  Also, to slash comprehensively, should
> your
> damascened meat-cleaver not chop out Milton's astonishing lines in
> III.13-21,
> where he tells us (in effect) that he has just flown alongside Satan, and
> like
> Satan is now about to "revisit...with bolder wing" the Holy Light? A
> reader of
> the uncut poem would surely take that to imply Milton, "taught by the
> heavenly
> Muse," himself "witnessed" not only Satan's whole journey, but the
> encounter of
> Sin, Death, and Satan.
>
>
> Quoting Gregory Machacek <Gregory.Machacek at marist.edu>:
>
> > Professors:  Are you tired of your students pointing out to you that the
> key
> > that an allegorical character carries cannot open a gate for a
> > historical-mimetic character to walk through?  For a full three hundred
> > years, literary critics have known that the allegory of Sin and Death,
> while
> > fine, was improper.  Well, they've finally done something about it.  The
> > Improved Paradise Lost has been carefully designed by a team prominent
> > Miltonists to remove these chimerical actors from the poem.  Like fan
> edits
> > of the Phantom Menace that remove the annoying Jar-Jar Binks, this
> edition
> > cleanly excises the offensive Sin and Death--while leaving the poem
> > fundamentally about (historical-mimetic) sin and death.  To see how
> > dramatically this excision improves the original, simply follow these
> > directions in any of the many improper editions presently available on
> the
> > market.
> > From Book 2, omit the material from the second half of line 648 through
> the
> > first half of line 884.  Line 648 should now end "Surprised but with
> delight"
> > and the new line 649 begin "Satan observed."
> > From Book 10, after line 228, add "Mean while, the enemy of God and Man,
> /
> > Had" and omit the material running from line 229 through 331 and the
> first
> > word of 332.
> > After line 346, add the following two lines "The gate he found wide open
> and
> > unguarded still, / His comrades, torments still unassuaged,"  then omit
> the
> > stretch running from the present 347 to 422.
> > Replace line 473-4 with the following "The tread of your triumphant feet
> > shall pave / Anon a broad and easy way; but I"
> > After line 584, insert the following passage:
> > Their former shapes recovered now, they troopAcross the bog of Chaos
> > inconcreteAnd trample, in their ruinous multitude,Th'unsettled
> Inconsistence
> > to a broad,Smooth way, o'er which henceforth both theyMight haste on
> purposes
> > maligh, and allOn Earth that towards hell inclines might speed.This
> baleful
> > march uncurbed th'Almighty seeing
> > Omit lines 585 through 613.
> > Line 621 now reads "Folly to me, that with such marvelous ease" and 622
> is
> > omitted.
> > See if you don't agree that these changes improve what had been, no one
> > denies, already a pretty good poem.  A Word document presenting these
> edits
> > as a continuous text is available upon request.
> >
> >
> >
> >
>
>
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